INTEMPERANCE VII - Chapter 16, Waiting On the World to Change
Added 2023-09-05 03:03:32 +0000 UTCAnd we move closer to a pivotal point in the story and in the history of our planet. Let me know how I did, like always. I kind of like the way I planned this part out and presented it. Am I right?
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JC
2023-10-24 10:54:16 +0000 UTCShoulda seen t coming….but a holy fuck realization
Robar
2023-09-16 05:07:19 +0000 UTCIn previous trips, Jake didn't use the Avanti, since it is not fast enough for that distance. For other trips to the east, KVA used a chartered private jet. Obviously, this didn't fit the plot for 9/11.
Alle Joeng
2023-09-07 18:45:51 +0000 UTCOne minor detail that nagged at me: was it ever explained why they flew commercial and didn't take Jake's plane? Maybe there was an offhand comment earlier about not liking cross country trips because they take too long, or too many stops required. But since it was previously mentioned that the Avanti was not much slower than a private jet and Jake loves to fly himself, it did take me out of the story a bit since it wasn't explicitly mentioned why they're flying a scheduled airline flight.
Oracle
2023-09-07 13:33:46 +0000 UTCWhat grates for me is you stuck that song back in my head. What an anthem for the times we live in. Good chapter. Look forward to where you take us.
Damon Bynum
2023-09-07 13:24:14 +0000 UTC
