INTEMPERANCE VI - Chapter 17, Make Me an Offer
Added 2022-07-16 06:39:29 +0000 UTCIt's Satan's butthole hot once again here in the Sacramento Valley of California, so my productivity is up because I hole up inside on my days off and don't have much else to do but write. Hope you like this one. Some old characters make new appearances. Let me know what you think.
Comments
It's not a continuity error. Andre moved his house between Chapter 13 and Chapter 18. It seems too many golf balls come flying in on the 18th.
Al Steiner
2022-11-09 22:38:40 +0000 UTCone small, minor continuity error... in chapt 13, in the meeting with Andre at the cop bar, he states "Besides, my house sits just off the tee-blocks for the eighteenth hole." but here in chapt 17 it states "The Heliodorus mansion sat between the 5 th and 6th holes of the Casa de Océano Country Club just outside Avila Beach.
Gregory V
2022-11-09 22:20:45 +0000 UTCWill fix. Thanks.
Al Steiner
2022-08-15 21:04:23 +0000 UTCRe-reading this chapter and there’s a small continuity error near the end. Pauline refers to Andre as “the one we bought the winery from” but previously Andre told Jake “you beat me to that one” so Pauline’s line here should refer to Jake’s cliff side property not the winery.
Greg Coleman
2022-08-15 16:56:12 +0000 UTC
