Miko spider corruption p5-6
Added 2022-10-05 21:51:24 +0000 UTC2 more draft page done. Hope i can finish this in next 2-3 page.
As always if you have any suggestion or found any grammar mistake feel free to tell me in the comment.
Also thank you again for another month of support. I hope you have a good day.
Comments
Ignore part of what I said for part 2. Don't need the "me". I misread it XD
ElSalsaRey
2022-10-13 02:21:15 +0000 UTCUnless she was more "Demon Lord" and less "Goddess", in which case she would (probably) use more down-to-earth speech.
Nobody-Kadaj
2022-10-08 23:05:28 +0000 UTCI like the way that Yame-Hime is holding onto Kyo particularly his head in these panels, i get a pretty exotic seduction vibe from it๐.
MagicCobra911
2022-10-07 04:11:44 +0000 UTCPage 1: "Did you really become a god?" "I have become her priestess and her avatar." (forgot an e in priestess, same as the next usage) "Quite a mouth you have there, human." (I imagine a goddess would use more formal language, so I'd use "have a mouth" rather than "got a mouth" "It was a compliment!" (you used the wrong tense for "compliment") "It seems like I have to teach that mouth a lesson." (add s to the end of "seem") "You are as big a pain in the ass..." (added more of a clarifier to that phrase) "Starting with you human" (changed "start" to "starting") Page 2 "I was beginning to enjoy..." (changed "am" to "was" since he's not squirming anymore) "Did you really need to turn me into whatever this is?" (add "me" in between "turn" and "into", and changed "that" to "this" "No, but it did silence your rotten mouth, didn't it?" (changed "silent" to "silence", and "isn't" to "didn't") "If it were up to me, I would start tearing you limb from limb for your insolence" (added "were" and changed "insolent" to "insolence") "We are about to become sisters." (changed "sister" to the plural form) Loved it!
ElSalsaRey
2022-10-06 15:31:55 +0000 UTCOkay the second page at the last frame should read "Its your lucky day human we are about to become sisters'
D Banks
2022-10-06 01:04:49 +0000 UTCTG IS GOOD
TEMAK
2022-10-06 00:53:49 +0000 UTCWow, looking amazing! Will DM the grammer mistakes.
StarGazer
2022-10-05 21:53:23 +0000 UTC
