A Curse's Passion Chapter 12 (Before The Storm)
Added 2025-07-14 14:45:43 +0000 UTCClick the link below to read the chapter
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nn8YBSCKYYaySJBWAWFMWOQ0ir3HEZg9023W3byajz8/edit?usp=sharing
Comments
I know I'm a bit late to the party but you'll have to forgive me as I just found this fic yesterday. One thing I felt I should offer a critique was the dialogue between the Delacours. Would they not be speaking French to each other in their own home? The text reads like they're speaking English with a French accent. I feel the text should be written as plain unaccented English with the understanding of the reader that they would be speaking their native language.
The Humble CTurtle
2025-11-29 12:59:21 +0000 UTCLoving this story so far, recently read through the whole thing from start to finish but I found a few continuity errors. Details changing between chapters, an example timing of the full moon changed from 2 days after in the ending of a chapter to then become 2 days before the next chapter while everything read as being the same or next day. There were quite a few things like that. Would reccomend the author do a read through and make notes on anything that feels off before then doing an edit. Other than those issues though I will say this is an amazing story so far. Looking forward to more!
greatGUARDIAN100
2025-07-24 07:51:49 +0000 UTCit could be a thing where he is making sure not to terrify anyone by actually saying it since they will be going to Britain in short order, and making sure his daughter does the same.
Elias
2025-07-14 20:39:56 +0000 UTCGood chapter. But I have one critique. I don't believe Monsieur Delacour would say You-Know-Who he would say Lord Voldemort. But that's just my opinion. Still a good chapter.
Adam Clark
2025-07-14 19:20:32 +0000 UTC
