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Chapter 18 of No Joy in Command is out for Squires!

Okay, that was a doozy to write, both longer than I thought and shorter than I hoped for. It's a bit raw and unedited cause my editor is asleep, so I'll be posting now since I'm already late. Anyway, lemme know what you think in the comments!

Previous chapters can be found in the collection.

Chapter 18 of No Joy in Command is out for Squires!

Comments

Love this. I just don’t understand why Corlys is upset at the thought of either Baela or Rhaena being too Targaryen for Driftmark. If he is that worried, just have one of them wed one of Vaemond’s sons. He will still have his blood in the main line and it’s solidified by one of the girls wedding someone we know for a fact is Velayron instead of the speculation of Lucerys. An easy fix. Anyways, great chapter! I especially love how Clubfoot’s death was reminiscent of Littlefingers. It was sudden and unexpected and he died begging. Just perfect

Mimi13

Have an idea, if Criston Cole is still alive and if we follow show's trajectory then he is sleeping with Alicent. If Jon is able to torture/confess that out of him than he can show Alicent as cuckolding queen and destroy the green's reputatation completely as schemeing fucks who caused dance and move history in his favour. This an be done post victory as a way to make sure further Green support does not come even as a token force. inn OG timeline, Cregan was fighting for Rhaenyra even though she was dead.

Abhishek Kumar

Love the part with those of Cracklaw Point, who just about never receive any notice in fanfiction, or even in GRR Martin's epic. Jon " I do know SOMETHING" Stark seems off to a good start with having managed to bind the hardy and loyal people of the point to him, having removed the spy master of the Greens entirely, and forcing a turncoat to turn his cloak again. Next up? Riverlanders and Cregan? Or something else entirely, like removing an opposing dragon from the board? Want more POVs of others meeting with Jon, but also other POVs when they hear what Jon is doing. Looking forward to more. Excellent chapter.

Omar Syed

I can already tell that this is one I will come back to many times

Ryan

Once this story is done I think it would be cool if you did like a series of short stories taking place in this timeline. Get the perspective of the descendants in each era.

Maniac000


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