INTEMPERANCE VI - Chapter 22, Opening Night
Added 2022-09-06 03:29:52 +0000 UTCSometimes my chapters are a bit less than the average of twenty pages and I explain myself by saying that I was finished with what needed to be said and that's how many pages it took. This chapter is the opposite. It is considerably longer than the average because I was not finished with what needed to be said. As Jake says up on the stage: "I hope you like this". I give you the opening night of the Millennial Tour as experienced from multiple points of view. Let me know how I did.
Comments
Great job of taking us backstage and onstage at the concert. You have a great ability to describe just the right amount of detail to let us see and hear what the performers experience without overwhelming us with minutiae. As to the length of the chapters - I'm fine with any length you produce as you consistently bring each chapter to a logical conclusion while making me look forward to the next installment.
2022-09-10 21:26:15 +0000 UTCCaydee has met Laura, Jake, and Steph, but no one else. She'll meet them when they make the first flight to San Diego in the next chapter. And, while they all briefly met Meghan at the dress rehearsal, they will start to interact with her on that flight as well. Could be interesting on several different levels.
Al Steiner
2022-09-10 03:48:27 +0000 UTC
