Whoops... apparently I can't copy and paste :)
Added 2019-09-26 14:29:14 +0000 UTCThe story for Chapter 21 up on Lit contains more than I posted here because it has a big chunk of chapter 22. I'm just glad when I copied and pasted it I didn't chop it off mid sentence. So if you want a little bit of chapter 22, feel free to look on Lit. I'm going to amend it and then hope to have the full Chapter 22 up for you guys tomorrow.
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Suggestion on 22 "Pretty impressive, Mr. S," she said as she cheekily bit her tongue between her teeth and smiled. "I had a one night fling with Jackie... Carly's college... uhmm... girlfriend sort of?"" - need a paragraph break or other indication that the last quote is Jay not Louise. Lil jarring thinking Louise shacked up with Jackie somehow.
J B
2019-09-28 18:45:33 +0000 UTCWhen are we seeing next chapter?
2019-09-28 17:08:07 +0000 UTCHeh - welcome to humanity, realm of the feet of clay... Using technology typically just means we can go wrong faster & further than without it
J B
2019-09-26 18:23:46 +0000 UTCIt is. Although I'm pushing the limit in google docs (I actually had to break at chapter 15 because google docs was loading slowly and also having trouble downloading and editing on my phone. Unfortunately, it does create some opportunities for errors ;)
2019-09-26 17:48:00 +0000 UTCIt's so much easier working on a long multi-section story in a single file, isn't it?
J B
2019-09-26 17:05:21 +0000 UTCYou did, and it's good! :)
J B
2019-09-26 16:31:05 +0000 UTC
